This is probably the shortest poem ~ Love song ~ Love story, call it what you will, that I have ever written, even when the title is taken into consideration.
Beyond The Edge Of My Dream - 01 Jul 13
I wait for you
Then I started thinking that the structure could be changed without altering the words.
Waiting - 01 Jul 13
I wait for you
Beyond the edge
Of my dream
Which version works best?
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i like the feel of the first one best. i know there are traditional Asian poems which incorporate the title as part of the poem.
ReplyDeleteeither version works beautifully. i often try to change the normal flow even if it is by moving just one word. sometimes it works, sometimes not, but this definitely does!
Thank you dani ♥
DeleteI cannot decide which version works best for me but I am happy to post them both here.
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