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Rain Flows
I had just finished writing a review of a draft poem a lovely friend intended to post and included in what I had said I wrote the line "Rain flows in my mind". I realised then that I had to do something with it and gradually the remaining words flowed into my mind. After a few more prompts from Muse the poem was completed today.
Rain Flows - 24 Aug 11
Soft drumming on the roof
Trickle from an open tap
Within the cloud
Rain flows in my mind
Each drip translated
Into light
Scintillating
Coruscating
I see the colours
Of the sound
Rainbows writhe
In syncopated symphonies
Dance in light
Across the rivers
In my mind
Seeing the song
Hearing the light
Feeling the dance
Of the rivers
Rain flows in my mind
I offer this to you, make of it what you will - Muse doesn't always explain the meanings of the poems or prose that she inspires - but comments are, as usual, always welcomed.
This is an offering to http://dversepoets.com/2011/08/23/openlinknight-week-6/
this is one of your best poems! ever! it truly, literally took my breath away! stunning doesn't come close to describing it ~ thank you for sharing! i love it! dani
ReplyDeleteThank you dani ♥ your beautiful comments are really appreciated ♥ It is good to know that my words have that kind of effect ♥
ReplyDeleteVery nice. Great imagery and alliteration - "syncopated symphonies". Fittingly, this poem really does have a wonderful flow.
ReplyDeleteThank you Stephen for your great comments - I really appreciate them.
ReplyDeleteInspired by the fullness of nature's dimensions and her 'alter-egos.' Soothing therapy, drip by drip.
ReplyDeleteWhimsical. I enjoyed it.
Thank you Jeff for your lovely comments
ReplyDeletea beautiful poem, tribute to rain - which I
ReplyDeleteam in love with. the repetition gives your
poem a lyrical quality, echoes rain.
Thank you Shauna ♥ for your really beautiful comments ♥
ReplyDeletejust saw you over at dani's...great to see you as well at dverse...this is a lovely poem...rain is a besutiful and sensual thing for me...and i like to jump in the puddles...
ReplyDeleteHi Brian - good to see you - 'twas dani who persuaded me to post to dVerse. Happy to see your comments, thank you.
ReplyDeleteGorgeous piece!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mama Zen ♥ for your lovely comment ♥
ReplyDeleteThis is delightful. I dropped over from haikulovesongs. :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Fireblossom ♥ for visiting and for your lovely comment ♥
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